IELTS Band 9 Sample Essay No.9

IELTS Sample essay

The purpose of the IELTS Writing test is to evaluate your ability to organize ideas, write an appropriate response to a prompt, and accurately use a range of vocabulary and grammar. What does it take to get a top score (Band 9) on the IELTS Writing test? We’re going to break it down for you here.

Sample answers are useful as study guides – especially for IELTS essay band 9. Having access to previously completed work that you can have confidence in will show you what you are missing!
Use the following sample and its explanations to see how close you are to a band 9!

Why is this Essay a Band 9?

5 Tips for a Band 9 Essay

Useful Definitions of Advanced Vocabulary Used

26 Comments

  1. Quan November 7, 2013 at 9:04 am

    Why did the last sentence use the word “indefinite” instead of “definite”? May anyone give me an explanation? Thanks.

  2. Gustavo Revilla January 15, 2014 at 4:21 pm

    Great essay! and after reading it I think I’m not going to be able to write a 9-band essay in my life hahaha

    Thanks for share it Ben!

    Regards from Venezuela

  3. Shokhsanam April 23, 2014 at 8:21 am

    Well wrìtten but i would give 8.0 for this essay.

  4. Dr sachin June 12, 2014 at 3:26 pm

    Write no of words in brake. Great balanced essay.

  5. Dr Sachin Nandedkar June 13, 2014 at 6:40 am

    write no.of words . great balanced essay

  6. Patricia June 20, 2014 at 12:41 pm

    I felt the same as Gustavo…I couldn’t get a 9 even in Portuguese, my native language. But I’ll keep on taking notes of important words to use on the essay.

    Thanks!!

  7. kevin August 29, 2014 at 4:51 am

    wow pal
    there is one question in my mind
    how to remember such vocabularies haha
    so hard dude
    but you’ve done it..
    congo….

  8. Xheni October 1, 2014 at 8:41 pm

    this essay is absolutely unreachable!
    I will never score a 9 in my life! 🙁

  9. nosa April 28, 2015 at 12:34 pm

    … emdowed with or endowed on?

    which one is correct?

  10. Phương May 30, 2015 at 8:58 am

    It is a wonderful essay. I think it is difficult to reach. Thank u to the poster .

  11. Phương May 30, 2015 at 8:59 am

    It is a wonderful essay. I think it is difficult to reach. Thanks to the poster .

  12. Javharali Al Tashkenti June 4, 2015 at 12:18 am

    Hello to everyone, my Name is Javharali. I would like to be a member of this great IELTS house. I do not know English as good as you but, I think with the help of you I will became a professional user of this language. Thanks

  13. shyna June 23, 2015 at 6:05 am

    it is very good essay for reading and collect some ideas

  14. RUPALI July 25, 2015 at 3:21 am

    I got ecellent material for that I searched a lot
    thanks a lot

  15. HARMAN August 16, 2015 at 11:48 am

    HOW I GET 8 BAND IN SPEAKING

    • bw October 6, 2015 at 1:22 am

      Practice, practice, practice. Also get some feedback.

  16. Sandeep Kulkarni November 19, 2015 at 5:59 am

    I had a question related to third paragraph.
    ” Considering the solutions, greater investment in public transport would ease traffic congestion, as would bike lanes. In theory this would reduce air pollution, and possibly improve the well-being of the population if they did adopt a more active lifestyle and cycle to work.”

    Could the above lines be written in future tense as follows
    Considering the solutions,greater investment in public transport will ease traffic congestion, as will bike lanes.In theory this will reduce air pollution and possibly improve the well-being of the population if they will adopt a more active lifestyle.

    • bw November 20, 2015 at 3:37 am

      Hi,
      You can write “Considering the solutions,greater investment in public transport will ease traffic congestion, as will bike lanes.
      – Is ok but the original sounds better because it’s all hypothetical.

      In theory this will reduce air pollution and possibly improve the well-being of the population if they will adopt a more active lifestyle.
      Is a conditional sentence, so it needs “DID”, not WILL.
      Sharp observations Sandeep!

  17. MONIKA SORATHIYA November 28, 2015 at 10:28 am

    I GOT 9 BAND

    • Faizak February 8, 2016 at 11:28 pm

      How you got in writting ? Please tell us

  18. Farwa F. January 18, 2016 at 2:04 pm

    Hey guys. I have my ielts exam in a few days. Can I post my essay here in this topic? I would be so grateful if u all can give me a feedback on it. (An an expected band)

  19. Farwa F. January 18, 2016 at 2:07 pm

    My essay:

    Today, the quality of life in large cities is decreasing.  Discuss the causes and solutions.

    The quality of life in large cities is decreasing. If something is not done to combat this issue, the quality of life will continue on decreasing.

    More and more people move into large cities in order to avail the facilities which smaller cities don’t provide as much. Larger cities have more job opportunities for people,and provide  more health care facilities, more educational facilities, and more entertainment. However, as more people start moving into large cities, the demands of people start to outweigh the supply. In Dubai, where I live, for example, so many people had moved into the city last year that there were more people and less housing units to facilitate them. When the demand becomes more than the supply,  the price of everything starts to rise.  Therfore, the rents started to reach the peaks. This forced people who wernt able to afford the skyrocketing rents to move into smaller and cheaper apartments, or to go on sharing apartments with one or more families. Supply demand imbalance has also caused food to become more expensive, forcing people to go for alternative, cheaper products of lower quality.

    If we start to work now, we can help improve the quality of life in big cities in the near future. Construction companies need to plan ahead and start constructing more housing units from now. Furthermore, more of local food should be produced in the country to provide people with cheaper food alternatives in the growing market

    In conclusion, larger cities have lower the standard of life for many. However, if we start to work now, we would be able to combat this problem in the near future 

    • Pondering Psychopath May 8, 2016 at 8:07 am

      Yes, it is a good attempt. I do not know if this reply is in time for your examination, but it might help others. Here are my views:
      Find synonyms of common words. In your essay, the word “more” is spewn-out in an inordinate amount.
      Consider changing the length of sentences. Concise, then lengthy:Add variety.
      Use formal English. Specifically, use ‘were not’ instead of weren’t.

      These are just basic fundamental tips to add flair to your writing and to make you appear well-versed, but they might do wonders for your writing score.

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